I met with my CoL last night. It wasn't nearly as hard and it was just as helpful. SAM gave me some good feedback both at the meeting and in his comments on the paper itself.
The most important of which was not to let the data drive the argument. Here is what he wrote on the paper.
You are letting the data drive your argument, rather than you drive the argument. What are the central features of othermothering? Identify those, then use the data to show how Rose othermothered & how this contributed to good teaching and academic success.
Wow... that means a concise narrative with a purpose, rather than a rambling story with unnecessary, albiet beautiful details. I still have quite a bit of work to do but rather than feeling discouraged I feel energized. I WILL DO THIS.
I still need to work on my presentation.